I wrote another song last week based off some personal going ons, and I wanted to share it with you to get some feedback. This is a first draft and I got a bit pitchy in the song, but I just wanted to put the general idea out there. I will be working on it more later. Happy 4th everyone! to listen, press pause on the sidebar player and press play on this widget:
here are the lyrics:
Know Me Better
By Kymlee Murphy
Copyright 2011
Something ripped us apart
Something ripped us apart,
I don’t know if I belong anymore
You played up your hand
You played your hand
I don’t even know how we got this way…
(Got this way)
You picked up your stones
You picked up your stones,
Didn’t care how bad they pierced my skin.
Now I’m lying in blood,
In all this blood,
Did you know I could have hurt me on my own?
All alone
Alone…
Make me something that I’m not!
Bring me back from what I’ve got,
Drag this madness to the edge,
Show me where it is I’ve been
(Show me where I’ve been)
Cause you know you’re better than me…
(No better than me)
Something turned dark
Something turned dark
I was afraid without your guiding hand
But then I gave in,
I’m giving in
It’s not like I exist to you anyways!
Bring that rain,
The rain…
Make me something that I’m not!
Bring me back from what I’ve got…
Drag this madness to the edge,
Show me where it is I’ve been!
(Show me where I’ve been)
You know you’re better than
You know you’re better than
You know you’re better than me…
You know you’re better than
You know you’re better than
You know you’re better than
You know you’re better than…
Make me something that I’m not!
Bring me back from what I’ve got…
Drag this madness to the edge,
Show me where it is I’ve been!
(Show me where I’ve been)
Cause you know you’re better than me…
(you’re no better than me)
Something ripped us apart
Something ripped us apart
I don’t even know how we got this way…
With love,
Kymlee
Loved your voice and think the verse is perfect for the guitar, enjoyed the deep emotion/pain.
Why thank you Mary! I’m glad you stopped by! Thanks for the critique
Someone’s already said it, buts it’s true: you have a beautiful voice, and a whimsical mind. I wish you every success with your music
why thank you my friend! I’m glad you enjoy my music
Whimsical….. i love that word….. sigh
You have a beautiful voice!
why thank you my friend! It can always improve but I’m glad that you think it’s good!
Hope all is well with you ♥
FYI: I noticed that when I recorded the dual tracks, the timing is a hair off, so if the vocals sound slower, that’s why, I tried to edit as much as possible, but the software only allows so much.